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 Post subject: Happy Trails
PostPosted: Sun May 05, 2013 10:54 am 
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An adaptation of this story.

One issue I foresee is the audience tuning out visually since it's mainly narration against a black screen, so they might miss some of the text or photos. Also, it's kiiind of long.

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 Post subject: Re: Happy Trails
PostPosted: Mon May 06, 2013 2:03 am 
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Wow! That was great!!

The only complaint I have is the little bit of effect on the narration track of the audio.
Is there some distortion, or echo added? Almost sounds like someone intentionally making their voice deep, going out of their natural range.
I can see doing that if you were trying to give it an unsettling air or something, but in this case it just distracted me from the storytelling.
I guess I would have preferred a more natural voice, especially for a personal story like this, to make it more real and scary.

BUT, tiny complaints aside, I LOVE the idea of sitting and watching a scary story like this! Well done!

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 Post subject: Re: Happy Trails
PostPosted: Mon May 06, 2013 7:24 am 
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Thanks!

You're right, the pitch has been lowered a bit for the voice. A few reasons for this:

-As you said, setting an unsettling tone
-Evoking the "disguised voice" effect you sometimes hear in interviews by someone who wants to remain anonymous
-You can hear my actual voice in the video clip, which might be weird considering it's supposed to be a different character

I would definitely prefer that someone else narrate it! Glad you liked it though.

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 Post subject: Re: Happy Trails
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You've got a decent voice for this kind of thing, and it held my interest much better than the original story did in written, which I'm slightly ashamed to admit was a bit too long for me.

You are right, though, there's very little reason for the viewer to continuously view the black youtube video for over thirty minutes just to see a few pictures. I'd encourage you to add more to video if possible to avoid this being an issue, but if you can't, there's not a lot to do there. A more viable tip to give would be to add some degree of ambient noise to the background, it really does wonders for a scary story being narrated. Nothing too distracting, just a simple sort of humming could even work. As it stands, it's just a voice with the occasional sound effect, which has a lot of room for improvement.

In any case, I see a lot of bad readings, but this definitely falls into the better upper group. It isn't so much that your voice is well suited to it, I'd be honest and say it isn't in particular at all, but you've got a really solid steady tone to your reading, and it never breaks any immersion in the story, which in and of itself is pretty remarkable.

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 Post subject: Re: Happy Trails
PostPosted: Wed May 08, 2013 8:19 am 
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Thanks...I was actually listening to a part of it while Drone Zone radio played in the background, and the ambient music seemed to complement the narration. Man I love that station.

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